Wednesday, March 21, 2012

Sensational Haiku Wednesday: Battle

Sensational Haiku Wednesday is here again! This week's theme: Battle.



Weariness clashes
With vigorous sword strokes that
Beat down enemies


Opponents silenced
The warriors pause, swords dropped
Waiting for the horn


Robust but hollow
The bellow releases them
Until the next call


Orginally when I saw this week's theme, I thought . . .oh, easy. Ha! I thought I would include something of my story here . . .but then I read the news each day, and battle seemed a painful subject. So somehow, I ended up with those three haiku linked together . . .and I'm not sure if that really makes a haiku when there are three of them connected. It's more  of a senryu, I think.

So, anyone else have a poem or a story go a different direction than you orginally intended?
Ever have the news affect your writing?

If you would like to join Sensational Haiku Wednesday or just know more of what it's about, see Jenn at You Know That Blog


Scripture Verse that's been running through my head this week: "Have I not commanded you? Be strong and courageous. Do not be terrified; do not be discouraged, for the Lord your God will be with you wherever you go." Joshua 1:9

23 comments:

Karen Lange said...

I like these, Tyrean! There's a lot more to poetry than most people think. Thanks for sharing!

Tyrean Martinson said...

Thanks Karen! Thanks for stopping by!

Karen said...

They are very good. A continuation of the theme but each can stand on it's own.

Tara Tyler said...

great job! reminds me of a medieval battle!

Tyrean Martinson said...

Karen - Thanks! I appreciate your comments!

Tara - Thanks! I'm glad that it does . . .I kind of had medieval battle in mind, and then I started thinking about wars that don't end.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

What Tara said!
And like your closing Scripture verse.

Helen said...

Yes is my answer to both of your questions ... I really enjoyed your multiple verse haiku!!!

Ellecee said...

Very visual Haiku. I can see these guys doing battle. I wish we would learn as I imagine everyone does.

Lynda R Young as Elle Cardy said...

Wonderful Haiku.
My stories often end up heading into a different direction than the one I originally intended.

carol l mckenna said...

Excellent ~ well done haiku ~ and each can stand alone ~thanks ~ namaste, Carol ^_^

Tyrean Martinson said...

Thanks Alex!

Tyrean Martinson said...

Helen - Thank you! Glad I'm not alone in finding that things change mid-write.

Tyrean Martinson said...

Ellecee - glad you could visualize it! I often worry that I don't leave enough sensory clues in my writing.

Tyrean Martinson said...

Lynda - glad to know I'm not alone in having creative curveballs! Thanks!

Tyrean Martinson said...

Thanks!

Tyrean Martinson said...

Yadin - Wow! Thanks for the award!

Anonymous said...

Nicely done ... also reminds me of a Renaissance battle ... armors and all. I agree -- each could stand alone on their own merit. :)

Golden Eagle said...

Great haiku!

The news often affects my writing. That probably has something to do with the fact I write SF; a lot of it is so embedded in the way technology and society moves.

Michelle Wallace said...

Very vivid... I can actually see the armour and horses of a medieval battleground.
michelle.

Michelle Wallace said...

Very visual and vivid as well. I can actually see the medieval battleground complete with gladiators!
michelle.

Michelle Wallace said...

Sorry, computer giving me problems...

Tyrean Martinson said...

Thanks! I think SF and Fantasy are both great places to explore society and technology from the real world with a different twist.

Tyrean Martinson said...

Thanks!!!