Weariness
clashes
With vigorous
sword strokes thatBeat down enemies
Opponents
silenced
The warriors
pause, swords droppedWaiting for the horn
Robust but
hollow
The bellow
releases themUntil the next call
Orginally when I saw this week's theme, I thought . . .oh, easy. Ha! I thought I would include something of my story here . . .but then I read the news each day, and battle seemed a painful subject. So somehow, I ended up with those three haiku linked together . . .and I'm not sure if that really makes a haiku when there are three of them connected. It's more of a senryu, I think.
So, anyone else have a poem or a story go a different direction than you orginally intended?
Ever have the news affect your writing?
If you would like to join Sensational Haiku Wednesday or just know more of what it's about, see Jenn at You Know That Blog
Scripture Verse that's been running through my head this week: "Have I not commanded you? Be strong and courageous. Do not be terrified; do not be discouraged, for the Lord your God will be with you wherever you go." Joshua 1:9
I like these, Tyrean! There's a lot more to poetry than most people think. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteThanks Karen! Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteThey are very good. A continuation of the theme but each can stand on it's own.
ReplyDeletegreat job! reminds me of a medieval battle!
ReplyDeleteKaren - Thanks! I appreciate your comments!
ReplyDeleteTara - Thanks! I'm glad that it does . . .I kind of had medieval battle in mind, and then I started thinking about wars that don't end.
What Tara said!
ReplyDeleteAnd like your closing Scripture verse.
Thanks Alex!
DeleteYes is my answer to both of your questions ... I really enjoyed your multiple verse haiku!!!
ReplyDeleteHelen - Thank you! Glad I'm not alone in finding that things change mid-write.
DeleteVery visual Haiku. I can see these guys doing battle. I wish we would learn as I imagine everyone does.
ReplyDeleteEllecee - glad you could visualize it! I often worry that I don't leave enough sensory clues in my writing.
DeleteWonderful Haiku.
ReplyDeleteMy stories often end up heading into a different direction than the one I originally intended.
Lynda - glad to know I'm not alone in having creative curveballs! Thanks!
DeleteExcellent ~ well done haiku ~ and each can stand alone ~thanks ~ namaste, Carol ^_^
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteYadin - Wow! Thanks for the award!
ReplyDeleteNicely done ... also reminds me of a Renaissance battle ... armors and all. I agree -- each could stand alone on their own merit. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat haiku!
ReplyDeleteThe news often affects my writing. That probably has something to do with the fact I write SF; a lot of it is so embedded in the way technology and society moves.
Thanks! I think SF and Fantasy are both great places to explore society and technology from the real world with a different twist.
DeleteVery vivid... I can actually see the armour and horses of a medieval battleground.
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Very visual and vivid as well. I can actually see the medieval battleground complete with gladiators!
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Thanks!!!
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