tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3797583622244194866.post6412436971544414609..comments2024-03-07T03:54:50.068-08:00Comments on Tyrean Martinson - writer, daydreamer, teacher, believer.: SFFS Champion Chapter 1Tyrean Martinsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15356604721537744361noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3797583622244194866.post-41062237952287187932012-09-16T02:29:21.850-07:002012-09-16T02:29:21.850-07:00Welcome to SFFS :)
Opening lines are tricky. I sa...Welcome to SFFS :)<br /><br />Opening lines are tricky. I say write the rest of the story and revise it on your first editing pass - otherwise you'll never get there!<br /><br />Good luck.Chantalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05569187153786630277noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3797583622244194866.post-42863206005068024602012-09-15T15:22:38.134-07:002012-09-15T15:22:38.134-07:00Alex - Thanks! Tech help would be great! Those fi...Alex - Thanks! Tech help would be great! Those five senses . . .I should know them, right? sigh.<br /><br />Tara - Wow! Thanks for the amazing help!Tyrean Martinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15356604721537744361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3797583622244194866.post-60255511533367939702012-09-15T14:08:41.445-07:002012-09-15T14:08:41.445-07:00lightning struck from the thick black clouds as if...lightning struck from the thick black clouds as if igniting the fiery sword about to strike. Cowering in the wet, slimy mud with a broken sword in her hands, metal clashed and voices shouted all around her. When lightning flashed again, Clara's eyes popped open and she gasped for air.<br /><br />i like where this is going! hope this rewording gives you some ideas =)Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3797583622244194866.post-58389359769045752702012-09-15T13:56:25.180-07:002012-09-15T13:56:25.180-07:00A little html formatting would fix the spacing. Wa...A little html formatting would fix the spacing. Want me to email you a couple simple tricks?<br />You are asking the wrong person about gripping first sentences. The only suggestion would be to employ the five senses a little more. Might bring it more to life. But again, I'm not good at it either.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com