Wednesday, January 9, 2019

#IWSGPit Prep

Are you ready to pitch?

I have never actually participated in a pitch event before as a writer, but I have helped host two of these events.
I have read the feed and added in encouraging comments and reminders about the event rules.
I know which pitches catch my attention and which ones I have to read twice to understand, but that doesn't mean I can create one.

In a recent e-mail thread between IWSG Admins, one of the other Admins stated this basic plan for pitches:

Character Goal
Character Motivation

Can you get these into a twitter-length pitch?

I think you can. I hope I can.

In the comment section, please feel welcome to leave your pitch and to comment on one another's pitches. Let's be encouraging but also helpful. Can we help each other hone our pitches?

I have one that I'm trying out. I'm pretty sure that even thought it fits the twitter box for length, it's too wordy. Help would be appreciated! (Big question: do I mention my working title?) (Another question: do I add more space between the sentences?)

Dunnie hopes for redemption and friendship when he uses his super-power in school, instead his display brings dark forces to his family's doorstep.
Can Dunnie and his new friends work together to rescue his family and their community?

More details and the rules for #IWSGPit found HERE. 


Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

I think your pitch is great!

CWMartin said...

As I don't have an intelligent comment to throw in, let me try: Did you count words to assure "twitter size" or just type it into a tweet to see if it fit?

Elizabeth Seckman said...

I think your pitch is fine as is, but if you wanted to make it shorter, you could maybe get away with pairing it down to the top details. Like...

Dunnie uses his super-powers to gain redemption and friendship. But they also bring dark forces to his doorstep. Can Dunnie and his new friends rescue his family and save their community?

But I'm not sure that that's better. But it is shorter. :)

L. Diane Wolfe said...

Your pitch intrigues me.

krystal jane said...

Definitely no need to include the working title or any title. Sounds like a fun story. The second half of the first sentence really catches my attention. :) I tripped over the comma though for some reason. Maybe it can just be its own sentence? It could be what's making it sound wordy to you, because the two thoughts are funny together, but it's definitely not too wordy.

Madeline Mora-Summonte said...

I've never done a Twitter pitch, and I can't remember the last time I came up with a pitch in general, so I will not be much help here. :)

Having said that, I do think a tighter version - like Elizabeth's - might read better/quicker in something like a Twitter Pitch Fest. Good luck! :)

Heather R. Holden said...

Ooh, love your pitch. Can't help but be intrigued!

Although this pitch is already strong as-is, I feel the first sentence might flow better if divided into two, with a period placed between "school" and "instead." And since you're worried about this being wordy for Twitter, eliminating the question at the end might help make it tighter. The rest of the pitch shares enough to garner interest, so I feel you could get away with that if you wanted to. Good luck!

Susan Gourley/Kelley said...

Wishing everyone participating luck tomorrow.